tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2531324919089791378.post8474223570945626016..comments2024-03-11T11:16:50.056-07:00Comments on Writing with Hope: Magic 8 Ball MemeHope Robersonhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16877380868985454894noreply@blogger.comBlogger20125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2531324919089791378.post-10818554471040986292012-07-28T22:39:21.051-07:002012-07-28T22:39:21.051-07:00I had to re-read your intro to realize that they&#...I had to re-read your intro to realize that they're separate lines (bows head in humiliation. And yes, they all make perfect sense.<br /><br />Sounds like an interesting read!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2531324919089791378.post-59884718334904904672012-07-25T20:20:45.719-07:002012-07-25T20:20:45.719-07:00I agree! They all make sense to me too - what a co...I agree! They all make sense to me too - what a cool concept! The more I find out about this WIP, the more I want to read it! Thanks for the tag Hope!Kimberly Gabrielhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05588782441929008886noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2531324919089791378.post-23139968886779187942012-07-24T10:11:38.868-07:002012-07-24T10:11:38.868-07:00They all made sense to me. :) I'll admit the s...They all made sense to me. :) I'll admit the second one took me a second, but I think it is probably a lot clearer in context.<br />This sounds like a cool concept!Rachel Schieffelbeinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01629400142880123520noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2531324919089791378.post-14250072807441664582012-07-24T08:58:19.095-07:002012-07-24T08:58:19.095-07:00How fun is this! I love Magic 8 Balls. :)How fun is this! I love Magic 8 Balls. :)David P. Kinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17259276981865439853noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2531324919089791378.post-12748555408749072712012-07-23T20:19:22.500-07:002012-07-23T20:19:22.500-07:00Hey thanks! These make perfect sense. I mean onc...Hey thanks! These make perfect sense. I mean once you have established the very first time that they are wearing these wrist bands that scan them into various places within the facility, these sentences will be seamless.Lisa Reganhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12899014095250160853noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2531324919089791378.post-40349285602076633412012-07-23T20:05:02.001-07:002012-07-23T20:05:02.001-07:00They make sense to me. :) They come across as futu...They make sense to me. :) They come across as futuristic and you wrote them well.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2531324919089791378.post-34535769107840323902012-07-23T18:30:30.386-07:002012-07-23T18:30:30.386-07:00It makes sense to me! :) I hope I get to read thi...It makes sense to me! :) I hope I get to read this someday!Krista McLaughlinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09230770035490273428noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2531324919089791378.post-38428106669962255812012-07-23T14:39:54.261-07:002012-07-23T14:39:54.261-07:00Sounds like a fun project! I'm intrigued! :DSounds like a fun project! I'm intrigued! :DMorganhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15747144518868320969noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2531324919089791378.post-43370700864992399822012-07-23T14:30:28.919-07:002012-07-23T14:30:28.919-07:00Yep. Makes total sense. :) I'm loving the voic...Yep. Makes total sense. :) I'm loving the voice in this - can't wait to read it!!!<br />My ONLY crit and I'm being so picky because it is AMAZING, would be do you need 'the' in the second sentence... 'sends us into THE twilight.' I think it would work without... but like I said, totally being a douche by asking. :) <br />SOOOO impressed, Hope! Eep - so excited for the HNSD Ninjas.Jade Harthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13222077919322049845noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2531324919089791378.post-62647858119122490652012-07-23T14:06:54.155-07:002012-07-23T14:06:54.155-07:00They make sense to me. I wish I had one of those f...They make sense to me. I wish I had one of those for my closet to keep my kids out. Ha!Emily R. Kinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03892444969625637064noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2531324919089791378.post-12030142312798716942012-07-23T13:07:40.991-07:002012-07-23T13:07:40.991-07:00I agree with Taylor above me. The first one could ...I agree with Taylor above me. The first one could be rewritten like: "Holding my bracelet steady in front of the scanner, the door to my cage, I mean room, opens." I also thought the second was a bit of a run-on. If you fix it like this "He pulls me in the direction of the door and throws his wrist over the sensor [comma here] sending us into the twilight." you should be good to go. Really interesting idea with the bracelets/scanners, Hope. I know this sounds crazy and I'm sure you have a lot of betas already but I would LOOVE to beta it! :) Great post.Rachelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18076907708483883575noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2531324919089791378.post-8043038030151234412012-07-23T12:15:39.453-07:002012-07-23T12:15:39.453-07:00great idea!
just a suggestion for the first one,
...great idea! <br />just a suggestion for the first one,<br />"Holding my bracelet steady in front of the scanner, the door to my cage..."<br />the rest sound fine. totally see it!Tara Tylerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07587802105993889515noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2531324919089791378.post-11243611229468076472012-07-23T10:41:32.423-07:002012-07-23T10:41:32.423-07:00LOVE 'EM! Totally make sense and the story sou...LOVE 'EM! Totally make sense and the story sounds so intriguing!Leigh Covingtonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16377634002477171615noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2531324919089791378.post-74323452324786082212012-07-23T08:56:01.063-07:002012-07-23T08:56:01.063-07:00They all sound good to me. I like how they're...They all sound good to me. I like how they're varied, too. It's not the same swipe and go. Good job! (And thanks for the tag. I needed a post for tomorrow, and I've been stressing about something I could use some help with!)Lara Schiffbauerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13546286607078965432noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2531324919089791378.post-41586075163104949992012-07-23T08:51:04.911-07:002012-07-23T08:51:04.911-07:00Makes sense, also a cool idea!Makes sense, also a cool idea!Lynn(e) Schmidthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13111991752818662608noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2531324919089791378.post-18417913866777260592012-07-23T08:40:05.167-07:002012-07-23T08:40:05.167-07:00I take it these sentences each stand alone, yeah? ...I take it these sentences each stand alone, yeah? ;)<br /><br />The second is a bit of a run-on, but that can be fixed with a comma.<br /><br />Thanks for sharing. :)Charlie N. Holmberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13546802577363686054noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2531324919089791378.post-12778929833433826552012-07-23T07:35:22.663-07:002012-07-23T07:35:22.663-07:00Uh, huh?
No, I'm kidding, girl. Totally makes...Uh, huh?<br /><br />No, I'm kidding, girl. Totally makes sense. :) Reminds me a little of Minority Report only they're scanning wrists not eyes.Cassie Maehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17706774393186819619noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2531324919089791378.post-53749604013515869532012-07-23T07:03:05.025-07:002012-07-23T07:03:05.025-07:00Makes sense to me too.
That was an easy one. :)Makes sense to me too. <br /><br />That was an easy one. :)Suzihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16502606950280751205noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2531324919089791378.post-16097642361457408792012-07-23T04:01:44.044-07:002012-07-23T04:01:44.044-07:00Yes :) haha. It makes sense :)
Thanks for the tag...Yes :) haha. It makes sense :)<br /><br />Thanks for the tag my dear!Kelley Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06373650788799372118noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2531324919089791378.post-12448962323167354712012-07-23T01:13:08.125-07:002012-07-23T01:13:08.125-07:00They make sense to me! :DThey make sense to me! :DKyra Lennonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13853462182450429660noreply@blogger.com