Cassie at Reading Writing and Lovin' it and Angie over at Live to write…edit when necessary. are hosting this awesome blogfest, check 'em out :)
Today: Dialogue Introduction: Have two characters introduce each other using only dialogue--no backstory, no internalization, just dialogue between the two. Max 250 words.
Today: Dialogue Introduction: Have two characters introduce each other using only dialogue--no backstory, no internalization, just dialogue between the two. Max 250 words.
"This girl next to me," nods head to side, huge smile, nudge in the ribs,"she's the toughest person I know."
Blushes, looks away. "Whatever, Finnley."
"Seriously, even though she's the size of newt, Eri could kick your butt in a duel any day, she's kicked mine plenty." Winks and a nudge.
"That's because you're too busy smiling or blabbing to try very hard." Eye roll, tucking hair behind ear. "Too bad your running speed isn't matched in your sword fighting skills." Teeth showing.
"You'll never beat me there, little one." Wink.
"I bet your mouth runs faster than your feet!" Stiffling a giggle.
"Ha ha, funny girl! Do you want to bet again?"
Laugh. “We’ve been through that one before, no need to go there again.”
“I had to find some way to get you to admit you had the Calling just like me.”
“I can’t believe I fell for that.” Shakes head, mouth trying not to smile.
“That’s not the only thing you’ve fallen for.” Laughter, huge smile.
Looks away. “Whatever, Finnley.”
“Oh come on, like it doesn’t go both ways. You know he has feelings for you, too.”
Mumbles, “He despises me.”
“Yeah right. He’s fighting it almost as much as you are. When you’re a Protector, you’ll see.”
Chin drops, brows furrow.
"Sorry, Eri." Arm around shoulders. "It'll happen. We won't stop til it does."
Hop over to Cassie's and Angela's blogs to read the other voices and find out about this fun blogfest!
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Awesome. I'm dying to know about Finnley. And why all your CP's have got a crush on him :) thanks so much for your help on my query too. You're the best :) x
ReplyDeleteI think it's so funny they do! Finnley is not the crush type to me :)
DeleteOh, I have a crush on Grayson, Jade. The others can have Finnley :)
Deletegreat taunting language! didnt even need the tags and showing!
ReplyDeletegreat slice!
Thanks Tara, it was fun to write :)
DeleteAll of these dialogues are reminding me of e.e. cummings.
ReplyDeleteComparing dialogue to poetry, deep :) Or is it cause the rules or traditional dialogue aren't in play? Or maybe because mine might not make a whole lot of sense? Dialogue is not my strong suit :) I'd much rather write action scenes, but this was a fun way to look at it :)
DeleteFinnley!!! Great job picking him for the dialog challenge, lol. He is a yapper. Maybe that's why I like him so much, lol.
ReplyDeleteAnd this is so great for their friendship :) Love these two together :)
I never looked at Finnley in that light until you started critiquing for me :) The first time you said something, I was like, "What? She's a crazy girl!" ;)That's cause I knew what character was hanging in the balance, he's the hot one!
DeleteHAHA, the size of a newt. That's a great line. Their dynamic seems pretty cool. Nice job.
ReplyDelete~JD
Finnley is fun to write dialogue for :) He's a chatter box!
DeleteI love how you kept the tension moving throughout the entire scene. It kept me wanting to know more throughout the passage. Great job :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Jess!
DeleteVerrrry fun, Hope! I'm seriously having so much fun reading all of these snippets... what a great blogfest :D
ReplyDeleteMe too! And it's made me look at my characters differently, Cassie and Angela are brilliant ;)
DeleteAww, I really enjoyed the exchanges between the characters, it's light, flirty and fun! :D
ReplyDeleteThey have a really fun dynamic to write :)
DeleteYay! I loved this. Totally captured the two's personalities. SO much fun!
ReplyDeleteThanks Kelley, you know them very well by now ;)
DeleteThanks Nicole :)
ReplyDeleteI love Finnley, he seems like a great friend for Eri, good job!
ReplyDeleteHe is Eri's balance :)
DeleteHmm, I think I need to meet Grayson. Finnley sounds pretty great! Great job!
ReplyDeleteAaaaah Grayson :) Finnley is a fun character, but he's no Grayson ;)
DeleteAhem... I think I must make a stand for my Finnley :)
DeleteI love the friendship between Finnley and Eri. And until Finnley mentioned Eri falling for someone else, I honestly thought there was some feelings between Finnley and Eri. Very cute and very flirty. :)
ReplyDeleteGreat job, thanks for sharing.
Finnley was the third character I added to the story, didn't expect him right away :) And I didn't even realize the implication he might have a thing with Eri until others read it, he was a great addition!
DeleteGreat post, |I thought there were feelings between these two at first, as well Sounds a very intriguing story!
ReplyDeleteI want to read more! Great job, Hope!
ReplyDeleteAwesome! Thank you!
DeleteI wanted to read on as well! Great job!
ReplyDeleteOh thank you! Lovin' this blogfest :)
DeleteGreat back and forth. Nicely done. :)
ReplyDeleteAwww! I love them! So sweet, funny and caring too. Great job! Even more intrigued in your story now :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Leigh, they have a great relationship :)
DeleteGreat job. I love how I could feel the tension building.
ReplyDeleteI had a really hard time leaving a comment & then I saw your message about clicking on the title of the post-it worked. I couldn't find a place to email you either and I was getting frustrated.
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This is great Hope. I'm so intrigued by the chemistry and the history between them. You totally want to make me read on :)
ReplyDeleteVery revealing dialogue. The characters are distinct and interesting already with such a small snippet. I wanna read more. Well done!!
ReplyDeleteVery cool! I sure would like to know about this protector stuff. And how cute are these two bantering together:) Great job!
ReplyDeleteThey sound cute together.
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