Monday, July 16, 2012

Hookers

Falling For Fiction Blogfest!


The Hookers & Hangers Blogfest is underway! 

Today, July 16th, post the first sentence from each chapter.


On July 18th, post the last sentence from each chapter.


Post as many as you like! 

Falling For Fiction will be judging everyone’s first three HOOKERS and first three HANGERS, each of us picking two winners (MOST ENTICING HOOKER and MOST IMPOSSIBLE HANGER) making a total of ten winners! Winners will receive a 10 page (double spaced) critique and a Friday Spotlight on FFF!



Remember how I said I swear a lot and my new WiP's character, Pigeon, has the mouth of sailor making her fun to write? Well, you've been warned :)



Here is the pitch for my WiP, Birds of a Feather:

An overdose, meant to get the attention of her parents after her sister’s death, lands Pigeon at Camp Hope with other troubled teens. It’s up to Pigeon to decide if her Aves wings can fly through her cage of anger or if they’re a crock of shit like everything else she ignores there.


And here are the first ten chapter hookers for Pigeon's story:


* I hate this f %*@# year.

* Mile one is nothing.

* The more campers return, the more I feel alone.

* The scent of freshly mown grass relieves the puke welling in my belly.

* It’s torture walking into the auditorium, trying to find a seat, knowing I don’t want to sit by anyone in here.

* I don't want to belong.

* Lunch goes down as smoothly as it came up this morning, only with a slightly better after taste.

* Shit on a shingle I believe is the correct term for this meal.

* The thrill of payback runs a marathon through my insides.

* “Every year there’s some kind of trivia challenge, right?”




Did I hook you? 

Now hop around and check out the other hookers on display :)


56 comments:

  1. SOOOOOOO good, Hope. I'm dying to get my hands on this MS. :)
    Go pigeon! :) x

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  2. I love Pigeon!

    Shit on a shingle is actually really good. But I'm not sure if we are talking about the same thing. lol

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  3. I love the first line. I have said that about my day, week and even year. haha. But, it makes me want to read more.

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  4. Sounds like it is going to be an interesting read, 'Birds of a Feather.' I have to ask, even though I am showing my ignorance, 'What is shit of a shingle?'

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  5. I too want to know what shit on a shingle is :)
    these are awesome hooks

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  6. Those hooks are fantastic, all really intriguing. I really like Pigeon's voice. Thanks for sharing.

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  7. Between your hookers and your pitch, I'd definitely want to read this!

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  8. I get the feeling that food plays a big part in this book, especially bad food. My favourite line is the walking into the auditorium one.

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  9. Awesome hooks! Love the voice in all of them :)

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  10. Pahaha, loving these! "Shit on a shingle" might just be the best phrase ever!

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  11. The first one is the best! I LOVE this. I love what you're able to accomplish in terms of voice with these first liners. Amazing. I want to read this book already just based on this character's voice.

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  12. Great lines- I want to read the rest now. Such personality already showing through.

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  13. You're using puke!!! My Hope, using puke. I'm so proud :D

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  14. I say you did. Those are sweet hookers! :)

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  15. Nice! The "I don't want to belong" hooked me.

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  16. 4, 5, And 6 def. peaked my interest! Love the sass!

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  17. Hope-I LOVE Pigeon's voice. Ah, I can't wait to read this!!!

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  18. I love them all! I'm completely hooked, both from these and your pitch. I definitely want to know what happens.

    "Lunch goes down as smoothly as it came up this morning, only with a slightly better after taste." <--probably my favorite (though I'd hope the aftertaste was more than *slightly* better)

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  19. That first one made me laugh and I love the visualization in the 4th one. great hooks!

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  20. Great Hookers and your character's name. After reading, it fits her. Can't wait to read your Hangers. Enjoyed reading.

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  21. Cool hooks. I best for me were: " The scent of freshly mown grass relieves the puke welling in my belly." and "The thrill of payback runs a marathon through my insides."

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  22. Wow Hope, I love them all. She has such a great voice.

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  23. You hooked me at the word overdose. Did you really start the book with that first hook? Excellent. I read your hooks and got an idea of the story. We have a rehab place here called the Centre of Hope (commonly called the Centre of Dope) Sounds like a great story

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  24. Yes! And I couldn't help but laugh with the swearing...."Shit on a shingle"...love that line. Very strong voice for Pigeon - I would absolutely read this!

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  25. Almost forgot - have I mentioned how fun this blogfest is? I've really enjoyed reading everyone's entries!

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  26. 5th and 6th are awesome. I LOVVEE the voice in here! I would read on, definitely :)

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  27. Great voice. And I loved your logline. Sounds like a great story. I especially liked: * It’s torture walking into the auditorium, trying to find a seat, knowing I don’t want to sit by anyone in here.

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  28. "Shit on a shingle..." BAHAHAHA! I'm so going to use this in real life!

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  29. It's interesting how, with a few first lines, we already get an idea of what your novel and voice are like. Some of these are great, best of luck in the contest! And thanks for stopping by my blog.

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  30. wow, somebody hates camp!
    hope things turn around! and with payback running thru the insides, i hope thats a ghod feeling!
    great voice! fave is the shingle! definitely!

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  31. I love the "I don't want to belong". So much being said about your character right there.

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  32. These are so visceral (in a good way), that I'm completely intrigued by what might be going on. I definitely want to read more.

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  33. Oh my gosh! This one: Shit on a shingle I believe is the correct term for this meal' is SO GOOD. Finish this story so I can read it :)

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  34. 2+ 3 esp good but I like all of these!

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  35. These are wonderful and hilarious. The voice in this is great.

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  36. Wow. This girl is one disturbed teen! Love it.

    #1 and #6 are my favorites.

    Shit on a shingle is what we called every meal at camp!

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  37. Love her name, love her attitude. Pigeon seems like she would be fun to write!

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  38. Any time the f-bomb is dropped, know I am a fan :). All of these rock, Hope! All of them!

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  39. I love her name and she seems like a spunky character! :)

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  40. Your first line really sets the tone. I love it! :)

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  41. Hehe! Shit on a shingle made me giggle:) I loved them all and that pitch rocks! Seriously:)

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  42. Sounds like a great story, Hope, and I love your protag's voice. I really liked the line: I don't want to belong. What a great insight into your character in just one sentence...

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  43. You've hooked me. They're all very powerful and strong lines. Really liked: Lunch goes down as smoothly as it came up this morning, only with a slightly better after taste.

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  44. LOVE your sentences, Hope. Very powerful voice! and oops, I forgot to post this yesterday...posted it now though ;)

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  45. Seems like she's not too taken with the food! This character has a very strong voice. The personality really comes through here.

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  46. Uh, yeah, I'm hooked! I loved the thrill of payback one best. Just my kind of line!! Awesome!

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  47. I wonder what the payback was! These are great. Fantastic voice here.

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  48. I really had a good laugh at some of those... Love the voice :D

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  49. My favourite is "I don't want to belong."

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  50. I wanted to know about that lunch! Yes, I did.

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  51. Your character may have the mouth of a sailor, but my Sailor has the courage of a sailor!
    I liked "I don't want to belong" for sure:)

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  52. I LOVE this! Pidgeon sounds great and I can't wait to hopefully read her story on shelves. BIRDS OF A FEATHER is a great title and I love the hook as well. I want to know about the lunch as well. Great hookers, Hope! (I'm stopping by from Kimberly's Art of Infiltration interview)

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  53. Yep, you hooked me. Even from these sentences, I get a feel of Pigeon's personality. Great job.

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